tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post4257418171467654679..comments2023-10-10T07:18:30.391-04:00Comments on Away We Go: ReturningNancy Chttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04313721217543578257noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-18333982173971917032011-11-10T12:10:29.199-05:002011-11-10T12:10:29.199-05:00Love this! Is this what I've been missing in ...Love this! Is this what I've been missing in my online absence! Shame on me!<br /><br />I can picture Owen's doctors and nurses, whispering the names of their patients.... and I know that the stars were listening.tulpenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09244442556884959190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-37547489461754982352011-11-10T11:17:11.122-05:002011-11-10T11:17:11.122-05:00I've had two nephews who have been those babie...I've had two nephews who have been those babies so this really hits home for me. They are success stories, but I know not all are and so my heart breaks a little. <br /><br />That last line. Wow.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01044279582701415786noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-61437319947817775402011-11-08T14:35:02.549-05:002011-11-08T14:35:02.549-05:00I'm so stinking proud of you I could burst.
L...I'm so stinking proud of you I could burst.<br /><br />Love it. Can't wait to read the whole thing.Ashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16041241998702255016noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-24050692372970233402011-11-07T22:28:54.567-05:002011-11-07T22:28:54.567-05:00This is gorgeous. "and know that they were re...This is gorgeous. "and know that they were real" is a line that I think will stick with me for some time.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-69072548596083692842011-11-07T14:56:06.021-05:002011-11-07T14:56:06.021-05:00As a writer, I salute the (intentional or unintent...As a writer, I salute the (intentional or unintentional) sibilance in this piece...the repetition of the S sound is soothing, magical, onomatopoeic to the subject matter - <br /><br />As a reader, I simply surrender to the beauty of the words and the hopefulness. No reasons necessary.<br /><br />It just feels right.Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15244839430462103487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-51777601537230324822011-11-05T15:40:40.854-04:002011-11-05T15:40:40.854-04:00Oh that last line. It's perfect. Heart breakin...Oh that last line. It's perfect. Heart breaking, but perfect.<br /><br />This is a perfect example of character reveal to push the story forward. Hat tip, girl!Galit Breenhttp://theselittlewaves.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-19020765913661070092011-11-05T10:36:18.610-04:002011-11-05T10:36:18.610-04:00Wo1! The last line really got me -- "So the s...Wo1! The last line really got me -- "So the stars will hear them and know that they were real". My heart stopped on that one.<br /><br />TraciStarTracihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02119043204191845721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-65099783919156171802011-11-04T22:58:45.735-04:002011-11-04T22:58:45.735-04:00This hit just a little bit too close to my heart, ...This hit just a little bit too close to my heart, so I am crying now, but I loved the last line.TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-13129119303116886672011-11-04T19:12:18.477-04:002011-11-04T19:12:18.477-04:00My strong, brilliant, gorgeous 16-year-old niece w...My strong, brilliant, gorgeous 16-year-old niece was once one of those babies. Born 2 lbs, 2oz at 27 weeks. I'm in tears. This was so lovely.VictoriaKPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-41831863696593972292011-11-04T18:43:20.042-04:002011-11-04T18:43:20.042-04:00My heart... it is warmed and breaks all at once. ...My heart... it is warmed and breaks all at once. Your words brought me in, made me almost cry and then relief and morning loss. Beautiful!Kindred Adventureshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05703862176120091626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-51323290520788961202011-11-04T18:13:06.984-04:002011-11-04T18:13:06.984-04:00This says so much about Janie's mother. Her em...This says so much about Janie's mother. Her emotion with the babies can be felt. Well done.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-64713042096686292092011-11-04T15:55:35.519-04:002011-11-04T15:55:35.519-04:00This pregnant lady started crying after "Greg...This pregnant lady started crying after "Gregory." Lovely but oh so sad.Cathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06960566071671771579noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-67821308447597812312011-11-04T14:57:55.264-04:002011-11-04T14:57:55.264-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-35595881473056663352011-11-04T14:57:38.602-04:002011-11-04T14:57:38.602-04:00I absolutely love the conclusion - the image of yo...I absolutely love the conclusion - the image of your character's mother returning to the womb to care for babies in a futuristic NICU is awesome. I particularly love the way the professional aspects of her job, like scrubbing up to avoid spreading infection and the details of each child's illness, contrast with her whispering their names to the stars. And that last sentence gave me shivers.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-13542662611530745932011-11-04T14:18:33.706-04:002011-11-04T14:18:33.706-04:00Oh wow, I really love this. At first I thought th...Oh wow, I really love this. At first I thought the character's mom had OCD, but then it became clear that she's a nurse/doctor/assistant. I LOVE the description of what she talks about with the babies. Great job!Venushttp://imnotwritinganovel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-68979403026906648512011-11-04T13:46:04.456-04:002011-11-04T13:46:04.456-04:00she whispers each name, so the stars will hear the...she whispers each name, so the stars will hear them, and know that they were real. <br /><br />that line was beautiful!Alexhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03908409066878493079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-80440252262799126242011-11-04T12:49:07.706-04:002011-11-04T12:49:07.706-04:00Dammit, Nancy. Making me cry in my peanut butter s...Dammit, Nancy. Making me cry in my peanut butter sandwich is NOT cool.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-61647050714227740302011-11-04T11:57:38.382-04:002011-11-04T11:57:38.382-04:00Heartbreaking and beautiful. Your moment gave me ...Heartbreaking and beautiful. Your moment gave me chills. You've made it impossible to forget those three names, Keston, Miranda, Gregory.Rachel @ Totally Ovar Ithttp://www.totallyovarit.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-78917176580997822362011-11-04T11:51:50.795-04:002011-11-04T11:51:50.795-04:00Absolutely crying right now reading that. You just...Absolutely crying right now reading that. You just shared so much beauty in very few words.Tracie Nallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908908021649000930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-79786760131256686802011-11-04T11:51:44.971-04:002011-11-04T11:51:44.971-04:00Lovely piece, reminds me of the story of how they ...Lovely piece, reminds me of the story of how they found out how to make the premies thrive. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-13565194235016734972011-11-04T11:47:44.953-04:002011-11-04T11:47:44.953-04:00What a special role... and what a blessing... to b...What a special role... and what a blessing... to be connected to the beginning of life and watch it grow and blossom...MISHhttp://writer-in-transit.co.za/8-00pm-tryst/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-42917929334105336262011-11-04T10:18:51.048-04:002011-11-04T10:18:51.048-04:00"Moon beams" one of my favorite expressi..."Moon beams" one of my favorite expressions. <br /><br />I was right back in the NICU with all those amazing nurses around me, smiling, guiding, encouraging LIFE.<br /><br />I like knowing her mother more...she cares for those babies. Does Janie feel good about that or her love of them and her distraction from her own daughter? I wonder........<br />it's going to be quite a story.Kirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17894442143508446312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-53242936207261324132011-11-04T08:28:22.345-04:002011-11-04T08:28:22.345-04:00She is an angel.....so beautiful!She is an angel.....so beautiful!Formerly known as Frauhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12798890008067408048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-48400575643466821892011-11-04T02:09:45.673-04:002011-11-04T02:09:45.673-04:00I liked the ending line. And I like that so much ...I liked the ending line. And I like that so much about Janie's mom tells us a bit more about her. :>Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06572568205513606978noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-15995520374583850532011-11-03T23:31:33.900-04:002011-11-03T23:31:33.900-04:00I love the line about what she talks to the babies...I love the line about what she talks to the babies about. I like that her mother is a caretaker, a protector.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.com