tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post4974348271590061852..comments2023-10-10T07:18:30.391-04:00Comments on Away We Go: Red Writing Hood: Snow DayNancy Chttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04313721217543578257noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-53835404126686482392011-11-13T09:21:56.755-05:002011-11-13T09:21:56.755-05:00I want to write like you when I grow up.
Oh.
Wai...I want to write like you when I grow up.<br /><br />Oh.<br /><br />Wait.<br /><br />Okay.<br /><br />Never mind.<br /><br />You can really write!Jennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12462124067637610359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-14625651321941573862011-11-11T16:15:22.288-05:002011-11-11T16:15:22.288-05:00Love this Nancy! I adore the familiar details like...Love this Nancy! I adore the familiar details like Starbucks, Chipotle and it *always* snowing in Wisconsin. :)<br /><br />My favorite line though was "Watch yourself."- perfect Mama wording!Galit Breenhttp://theselittlewaves.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-37413252191634466642011-11-11T15:43:27.941-05:002011-11-11T15:43:27.941-05:00I love the dynamic between these two. Makes me wis...I love the dynamic between these two. Makes me wish I'd had a different childhood. As usual, you do dialogue so well!Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01564542013071462911noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-21748241951578451732011-11-11T13:37:32.821-05:002011-11-11T13:37:32.821-05:00This is really great! I think you captured the di...This is really great! I think you captured the different voices really well. My only gripe is that I really wanted a sigh after "I've failed as a feminist." But that's just being nitpicky, good stuff!Venushttp://imnotwritinganovel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-45305675519146544872011-11-11T12:13:17.183-05:002011-11-11T12:13:17.183-05:00This was great. I could feel the relationship betw...This was great. I could feel the relationship between mother and daughter and I love the "special powers" twists.<br /><br />Also, I think you met the prompt requirements very well. It was all in the dialogue.Sarahttp://www.sarahealy.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-83201455619602884582011-11-11T11:48:40.314-05:002011-11-11T11:48:40.314-05:00This was a great conversation. I love the back and...This was a great conversation. I love the back and forth and the quick correction by the mother without missing a beat.The Drama Mamahttp://frommywriteside.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-10845748915491269192011-11-11T10:16:29.947-05:002011-11-11T10:16:29.947-05:00I think you wrote the teenage chat-back perfectly....I think you wrote the teenage chat-back perfectly. <br /><br />LOVED the image of Grandma on her porch shooting chipmunks!earlybirdhttp://mangetoutetc.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-51362206239499861262011-11-11T10:14:37.744-05:002011-11-11T10:14:37.744-05:00This is perfectly balanced between a normal mom an...This is perfectly balanced between a normal mom and daughter conversation and a hint of magic. Love it, and I definitely want to know more.Kristinahttp://kristinamarieb.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-67242480110615711152011-11-11T10:04:50.207-05:002011-11-11T10:04:50.207-05:00Perfect.Perfect.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-3391745872570521952011-11-11T09:07:46.947-05:002011-11-11T09:07:46.947-05:00Felt like I was a piece of furniture or a fly on t...Felt like I was a piece of furniture or a fly on the wall. Perfectly blocked and dialogued. <br /><br />One of yoru best pieces.Lancehttp://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-18853885104185792392011-11-11T09:03:09.705-05:002011-11-11T09:03:09.705-05:00A typical mother-daughter conversation about somet...A typical mother-daughter conversation about something not so typical. You nailed it!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-73302631389402786202011-11-11T07:48:01.658-05:002011-11-11T07:48:01.658-05:00Easy flowing, realistic dialogue between mum and d...Easy flowing, realistic dialogue between mum and daughter. I loved the "Shut up" moment - typical teen phrase.MISHhttp://writer-in-transit.co.za/tete-a-tete/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-27905831989018624912011-11-10T19:33:11.395-05:002011-11-10T19:33:11.395-05:00This sounded so true. I LOVED the Wikipedia thing....This sounded so true. I LOVED the Wikipedia thing.VictoriaKPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-41273455091869991162011-11-10T15:35:53.841-05:002011-11-10T15:35:53.841-05:00this conversation was so authentic and real, I cou...this conversation was so authentic and real, I could have been sitting in that car listening to them have this discussion. (It might be time to rewrite mine...GAH) <br />but I also love how you show us this family little by little...it's like "the Incredibles" only BETTER. :)Kirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17894442143508446312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-26558836315997194662011-11-10T15:31:51.598-05:002011-11-10T15:31:51.598-05:00A note from the annoying lapsed English teacher:
...A note from the annoying lapsed English teacher:<br /><br />I LOVE that you use "says" and not every available synonym in the thesaurus in your dialogue tags.<br /><br />Plus, you don't include dialogue tags with each statement; instead, you substitute action when it's obvious who is talking.<br /><br />Most importantly, you don't utilize a single unnecessary adverb.<br /><br />"Hooray for you!" Julie exclaimed enthusiastically. :-)<br /><br />(You model good writing most excellently.)Juliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15244839430462103487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-61173383696822930252011-11-10T12:06:17.836-05:002011-11-10T12:06:17.836-05:00Giggling at your 4th of July comment. Progressive,...Giggling at your 4th of July comment. Progressive, year-round school? Gifted & talented enrichment program? Maybe the 4th of June :)<br /><br />This is lovely, though. I could hear them talking, Janie's exasperation, her mom's calm explanation.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-70830638022546084342011-11-10T12:05:46.418-05:002011-11-10T12:05:46.418-05:00I didn't want to call you on the 4th of july t...I didn't want to call you on the 4th of july thing.<br /><br />:)<br /><br />I did drive through a snowstorm in july in Idaho once though...while I was on Dead tour...soooooo... yeah. Do with that what you will.<br /><br />Love the flow of their back and forth... wish my Mom had been that easy to talk to!tulpenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09244442556884959190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-41848306155716056402011-11-10T11:19:56.113-05:002011-11-10T11:19:56.113-05:00Nanowrimo at it's finest. Just realized 4th of...Nanowrimo at it's finest. Just realized 4th of July won't work. School in July?Nancy Chttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04313721217543578257noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-57691756418348679782011-11-10T11:07:20.166-05:002011-11-10T11:07:20.166-05:00The authenticity of this conversation is wonderful...The authenticity of this conversation is wonderful. The teenaged disdain, the casual ways we as parents correct behavior without stopping the flow of talk...<br /><br />And then the marvelous balance of curiosity and disbelief from Janie.<br /><br />I like her mom. Quite a bit. And I love the hint of ... magic? otherness? that I get from them because it's so grounded in reality.Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.com