tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post7108911845356052779..comments2023-10-10T07:18:30.391-04:00Comments on Away We Go: Red Writing Hood: EmbersNancy Chttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04313721217543578257noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-24172671629947387592011-06-27T13:42:06.459-04:002011-06-27T13:42:06.459-04:00Feels like it's been forever since I've re...Feels like it's been forever since I've read here. I've missed you Nancy!<br /><br />I was totally lost in this story. In the excitement of it. In the heart of it. In the horror of it...<br /><br />So familiar. It was like reliving the bad dream that was my adolescence. Brilliant because it was so real. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-3468635959621376322011-06-24T01:53:38.056-04:002011-06-24T01:53:38.056-04:00Oh so good!Oh so good!Yuliyahttp://www.shesuggests.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-26917079796926225472011-06-19T21:37:24.131-04:002011-06-19T21:37:24.131-04:00Oh I want to give her a hug.
So well done, you g...Oh I want to give her a hug. <br /><br />So well done, you gave your characters such life in a short amount of time. <br /><br />Love the lines "she unpacks this story" & "reeking of patchouli and studied irony."McKennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09299201553545817162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-70008169605677421032011-06-18T19:44:43.732-04:002011-06-18T19:44:43.732-04:00O.U.C.H. That's a tough ending but a very wel...O.U.C.H. That's a tough ending but a very well written story. Nice job on the prompt.<br />xo jjJoanna Jenkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10836376588710862173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-56000431298611326012011-06-18T15:24:21.323-04:002011-06-18T15:24:21.323-04:00That ending is heartbreaking! This was such an ama...That ending is heartbreaking! This was such an amazing piece. The details were so vivid, the writing so clean.<br /><br />LOVED it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-83827863745249340182011-06-18T11:20:36.070-04:002011-06-18T11:20:36.070-04:00Wow...awesome as per usual. You kept me hooked the...Wow...awesome as per usual. You kept me hooked the entire time. Ending shattered my heart tho, but thats good writing.An Imperfect Mommahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11032171890421217790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-51022538210033318862011-06-18T09:02:04.233-04:002011-06-18T09:02:04.233-04:00You just shattered my heart. Wow.You just shattered my heart. Wow.TKWhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16409505008377005185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-92059341804513317042011-06-18T01:12:28.202-04:002011-06-18T01:12:28.202-04:00Kept me hooked to the end although I hated the end...Kept me hooked to the end although I hated the ending it is reality isn't it? So well written.julie moorehttp://juliemooreonlife.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-46923924768872923472011-06-17T23:48:58.784-04:002011-06-17T23:48:58.784-04:00Wow, how did you know about me when I was a teenag...Wow, how did you know about me when I was a teenager? EErie. Very haunting story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-78053996696777699592011-06-17T22:01:46.997-04:002011-06-17T22:01:46.997-04:00Devastating. This evoked a physical reaction. I li...Devastating. This evoked a physical reaction. I like Rachael. She's my kind of heroine. You most defintely should be doing fiction more often.Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01564542013071462911noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-27021252889887313892011-06-17T19:17:21.543-04:002011-06-17T19:17:21.543-04:00This really hit home for me.
I was totally one o...This really hit home for me. <br /><br />I was totally one of the guys. And so I remained one of the guys for what felt like forever. <br /><br />I liked the twist, it was incredibly well done.<br /><br />One typo: "He's my father, and a complete bastard, and I even I can see he was hot."Cherylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14025221975648580117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-79810525883685728392011-06-17T17:10:47.970-04:002011-06-17T17:10:47.970-04:00this had such a gut wrenching twist at the end. Po...this had such a gut wrenching twist at the end. Poor Rachel. <br /><br />visiting from RDCCarriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-48051661559211477292011-06-17T14:27:30.373-04:002011-06-17T14:27:30.373-04:00Jesus, this hits hard.
There's so much to lov...Jesus, this hits hard.<br /><br />There's so much to love here. I was a camp counselor, but at an all-girls camp--which lessened the romantic drama some. This definitely rocketed me back to 1995.<br /><br />I seriously loved two lines.<br />"reeking of patchouli and studied irony"<br />"I could taste our salt"<br /><br />You are one gifted writer, my dear.CDGhttp://moveovermarypoppins.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-71281899344187098012011-06-17T14:15:17.892-04:002011-06-17T14:15:17.892-04:00Oh do I ever want to hug this girl!
This came to...Oh do I ever want to hug this girl! <br /><br />This came together perfectly Nancy. the dialogue, the descriptions, the depth in variety of characters. <br /><br />This line: "I could taste our salt" gave me chills.<br /><br />And the ending? Mike's an ass. So there. <br /><br />XOGalit Breenhttp://theselittlewaves.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-50013326196183955042011-06-17T13:00:01.100-04:002011-06-17T13:00:01.100-04:00Wow! This knocked the air right out of my lungs. I...Wow! This knocked the air right out of my lungs. I knew that the ending was going to be devastating from teh very first line, but there was a glimmer of hope that maybe what she wasn't supposed to overhear was something positive, anything positive, but for it to be that brutal was amazing.<br /><br />This line really nailed the feeling of the whole piece for me, "I swallowed his scraps despite myself."Jenniferhttp://whispatory.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-6578670822447116862011-06-17T11:46:16.721-04:002011-06-17T11:46:16.721-04:00Oh that poor thing! It's amazing how much dev...Oh that poor thing! It's amazing how much devastation a few careless words can cause. Good lesson. Well done.Kerry Ann @Vinobaby's Voicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04295304663766870450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-53720657745385603282011-06-17T10:06:53.549-04:002011-06-17T10:06:53.549-04:00This is so sad... it's tough being one of the ...This is so sad... it's tough being one of the guys. I hope it's fiction.<br />Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-72600245848926406622011-06-17T09:22:16.790-04:002011-06-17T09:22:16.790-04:00Oh, how painful! This read so real.Oh, how painful! This read so real.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14005671088564014638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-10474403128211304542011-06-17T07:56:14.490-04:002011-06-17T07:56:14.490-04:00Boys are stupid. This was a work of fiction right?...Boys are stupid. This was a work of fiction right?<br /><br />Really well written. Your words drew me into the scene straight away.<br /><br />Thanks for posting it. :)SheHasCuteShoes!https://www.blogger.com/profile/00561204720142033959noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-92195641560506763102011-06-17T07:43:26.784-04:002011-06-17T07:43:26.784-04:00Love it but hated that feeling I remember feeling ...Love it but hated that feeling I remember feeling so many years ago!Formerly known as Frauhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12798890008067408048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-53702532297732137812011-06-16T21:36:35.703-04:002011-06-16T21:36:35.703-04:00This is devastating. Absolutely devastating.
I wa...This is devastating. Absolutely devastating.<br /><br />I was not expecting that twist at the end. <br /><br />In the beginning from Rachel overhearing him and her memory, I got a bit confused, because I didn't realize the transition, but other than that, it was perfect!<br /><br />Can I punch Mike? Because he really deserves it.Tracie Nallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07908908021649000930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-66619683422921806612011-06-16T21:26:39.816-04:002011-06-16T21:26:39.816-04:00Ouch. Fantastic and painful.Ouch. Fantastic and painful.VictoriaKPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07987993161693042703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-74286694708594259992011-06-16T19:52:53.122-04:002011-06-16T19:52:53.122-04:00I hope this is pure fiction.
Loved this so much....I hope this is pure fiction. <br /><br />Loved this so much.<br /><br />Boys are such jerks.tulpenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09244442556884959190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4704768195528999087.post-44580113730859161282011-06-16T18:01:01.391-04:002011-06-16T18:01:01.391-04:00Oh...the ending of this totally jabbed me in the g...Oh...the ending of this totally jabbed me in the gut and heart. I think because my 12-22 year-old self could totally relate. <br /><br />You have such a way, my dear.Cobyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14704408483741211604noreply@blogger.com