That leaves me breathless.True, fear.Great job.
Ack! I came by way of your #writeonedge tweet and due to yesterday's earthquake inspiration and your words here, you had me firmly planted in reality. Then the ground ate Stephen and I momentarily, internally freaked! Then, I remembered that it was only a 4.0 and reality's children are just fine. Phew! Great one! :>
Oh, this is so sad. And absolutely terrifying. Good job.
Ooo... lots of interesting thoughts here - image of the earth swallowing a child: chilling!
Oh... no...Always the ones with kids hit the hardest!
"His chubby hand stiffened". This is horrifying. I always had dreams like this when my kids were little.
these few words leave you absolutely terrified. It's the kid factor. Always gets you
This makes me need a hug.
This is so sad and terrifying. I can't imagine!
Great job....I can feel the fear..Have a wonderful weekend!
I am particularly drawn to the play-dough under his nails. That imagine would be etched forever... heart stopping. And beautiful. And sad. My favorite writings ever are flash fictions. This kind of viscerality is why.
Eeee! Stomach twisting. Yeah, ok. You so got the fear.
I was laughing with my coworker as I clicked your link...and now it "DIED" in my throat. Wow, you blew me away.
Wow! You are so much braver than me... I couldn't bear to write something that would truly truly scare me, like losing my child (or any child). Good for you for going there! Very scary indeed.
Oh I don't like this one bit. Which means, of course, you did an amazing job. It's just so painful and scary because we are helpless as the scene unfolds.
Anything with children is scary. I can't stand the thought of losing on my kids.
Oh, wow, wow!! That is true fear. I'm shaking a little - seriously (being a Mom of sons). Never want to experience this. Excellent job!
Ack! No fair using kids! That's actually scary!
There's a lump in my throat. I have no words, which means this is perfect. I shudder and had to squeeze my eyes when I imagined it.
Incredible! The impact of this was amazing.
I'm with Noisy, the play-dough kills me. A minute detail that every parent may conjure. True terror.Nice.
Oh my heart, ouch.I love (and hate) the play doh detail- so close to home.
I am freaking out with this one. WOW
Now that's spooky when your child is involved. It sure matches your header photo. Chills. (Thank you for stopping by by blog)
I hate this but love it too. The rest of story...
This is unthinkable... the images are frightening and vivid...
Yep, definitely fear.Wow,jj
I love that the earth groaned...as if even the dirt were protesting the loss.
Intensity in a small package. WOWThat'll stick with me for awhile.
EEekk! Such a small piece, yet, so scary!!Well done!
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